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Tuesday, May 24, 2011

Hanging By A Moment - Indie Ink Weekly Challenge

Despite my warning to not expect anything from me blog-wise this week as I am already mentally on my Vegas vacation, I already committed to the Indie Ink weekly challenge so you will get a little bit of writing out of me this week after all. Lucky kids! 


The challenge I received from Disease at http://chamindra.blogspot.com/ is listed after my entry. Hope you enjoy. 



Hanging By A Moment

It is our last night together.  Tomorrow morning he will be gone.

We don’t talk much. There really aren’t the right words to be found in this situation. It just hangs in the air between us, but we refuse to acknowledge it.

We spend a lot of time just looking at each other, trying to memorize the features that we have grown to love in one another in the short time that we have been in each other’s lives. For me, it’s his eyes that I want to always remember.  The little lines in the corners that deepen when he smiles, how they literally sparkle when he is up to no good, and how they seem to look right into my soul when he tells me he loves me. They are blue. Not like the ocean or the sky but a different, beautiful blue that is all his own. I want to see those eyes looking at me forever but I will take tonight since it is all we have.

You would think that we would have planned some spectacular night out on the town. Visiting our favorite places or seeing friends that he likely won’t see again for a very long time. But that is not our plan. Our plan is simple, to just be together.  To quietly take each other in, enjoy our time in this last moment.

As the minutes tick by the sun starts to lighten the predawn sky. I usually love the beauty of the sunrise but today it brings with it a heavy reality. This is our last sunrise together. In a few hours, he will be gone and I don’t know if he is coming back.  

There is so little time left for us to be together. We both know it. But for now, we aren’t going to talk about the time apart or the distance that will soon be between us.  We are going to enjoy this, our “right now”.  It’s only a moment and soon it will be gone, and so will he.

My challenge this week was from Disease at http://chamindra.blogspot.com/
You have found that perfect moment but feels like it's slipping away... But you want to hold on 
to it and enjoy it till it lasts. you can 
use the song "Hanging by the Moment" by Lifehouse for Inspiration :)

My challenge went to Sid @ http://blog.creativeshocker.com/


17 comments:

  1. simple and beautiful. good job!

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  2. Wow!! you have given the response just the way I wanted it to be when I gave you the prompt in the first place =). Awesome work RG you have captured that moment so beautifully through your writing. Well Done !! =) Cheers !!

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  3. This is how I feel every time I read your blog... lol.

    I'm super stoked on hearing about your trip to Vegas. Go out have fun while the rest of us slave away working.

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  4. Wow. Pretty good post.

    Although it kind of made me sad in a way.

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  5. Surreal...and beautiful! To express a passing moment in writing is difficult and you did it so well!

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  6. Beautiful! I loved it. It was as if I was speaking the words myself. So surreal! Great write chica! Great write!

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  7. Tony Van HelsingMay 24, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    Touching.

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  8. This almost sounds like a Dave Matthews Band song: Say Goodbye.

    MAN, that song got me laid a LOT during the early 2000's!

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  9. For being already mentally on vacation, that was a pretty stellar entry there, love. ;)

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  10. I concur with Kat...kudos on a great post. There is something sadly beautiful and freeing when you know you only have one night...you captured it beautifully. Have a great trip!!

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  11. As the minutes tick by the sun starts to lighten the predawn sky. I usually love the beauty of the sunrise but today it brings with it a heavy reality. This is our last sunrise together. In a few hours, he will be gone and I don’t know if he is coming back.


    LOVE that paragraph. It's so emotional intense you feel the uncertainty of what's next.

    well done

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  12. Great job! So real and easy to relate to. You grabbed my attention right from the start! Well done.

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  13. Love this song, and you captured the enjoyment and longing immediately. I am back in for next time....I was being a quitter...but I quit.

    www.alotoflayers.blogspot.com

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  14. @Chamindra: Thanks for the great challenge prompt that you gave me. I had fun writing this one out, I've lived it for real but have never put it on paper so this was a good release for me.

    All: Thanks for the supportive feedback and great comments. It keeps me wanting to work at this writing thing!

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  15. Wow this was amazing. Reminded me of another song too; Angel of the Morning.

    Brllliant! :)

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  16. I love and hate those moments--captured wonderfully!

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