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Tuesday, March 1, 2011

Concrete

Hey kids, I know this will be a big departure from my most recent line of posts, mostly about all things sex related but I loved this prompt so I am switching gears today. Hope you can appreciate the other side of Random Girl.

Studio Thirty Plus is having a writing prompt in the forum this week. It is one word: Concrete. Here is my take on that.

Concrete

I hit the concrete hard. There was no soft landing, no recoil. Just a hard thud. In my stunned confusion, it didn't even really register with me. There was just the impact and me laying there, unmoving and uncertain. Should I get up? Could I?

Nothing was certain now. What seemed like solid ground, a firm standing, a place of complete confidence of what was under my feet had now transformed into my cruel punishment. What I had once stood on with my head held high and smile on my face was now the same place I was face down, broken and bent, bleeding and crying. And I don't even know what happened.

Or why it happened. I had been so careful with my steps. So intentional. Each one thought out and planned carefully. The climb up had been the greatest challenge for me. Stairs, so perfectly formed and stretching in an endless symmetrical pattern as far up as I could see. I was so excited to start that climb. I stretched carefully and visualized my legs moving in a perfect rhythm, my breathing timed to its own cadence. One foot, then the next. Higher and higher I climbed. My mind consumed with the end result, my victory.

When it happened, I couldn't believe that my stride had been broken. I was in such a perfect rhythm. I knew where my foot would land on the next step. I had relaxed into the effort, and had allowed my mind to go from the next step to the end result. And that was my fatal mistake. To get to the end, the next step must be executed as flawlessly as the last and I had lost sight of that. Swept up in my rush to complete and rejoice, I missed the next small but crucial step.

And that was all it took to send me off stumbling down, no chance to catch myself, to stop my descent. One sharp edge after another had its way with me, throwing me this way and that. My arms came up instinctively to cover my face, to try to protect what I could while knowing I had no control over the final damage.

The fall was much quicker than the climb. The concrete below my body was cold, almost soothing to my brokenness. I decided to just lay there for a while. Thankful for the fall that let me know that there was solid ground under me after all.

24 comments:

  1. The fall is always easier than the climb, isn't it?

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  2. Wow, I'm blown away by this. You are a fabulous writer! I'm not bothered in the least by your departure from your recent posts. I like seeing all sides of you!

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  3. I like this a lot Random Tall Girl.

    The fourth paragrah is my favorite. Total self awarness, complete personal responsiblity, and absolute honest reaction. Awesome.

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  4. Beautiful, my darling RandyGirl. I can relate to it so much, too...

    My prompt will be up later. It's okay, but I adore yours, sweetie.~

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  5. @KLZ: Yes, the climb you can plan for, you don't have the same luxury with the fall unfortunately.

    @Hannah: Wow, thanks for the compliment Hannah. Glad you like the other side of Randy Girl...I was afraid I would bore you today!

    @Lance: Thanks Lance. Your opinion means a lot to me based on the fantastic work that you are putting out. I pleased that you are pleased.

    @Sweet Kat: Thank you thank you for your comment. I can't wait to read your prompt post, you always amaze me with your work! *mwah*!

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  6. I came for the pull my hair post and stayed for the concrete. You? Are awesome.

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  7. @Miss Y: Thank you so much for checking out Random Girl, both the freak and the not-so freak parts! Thanks for the follow as well. Glad you enjoyed your visit.

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  8. Wonderful post, dear. It was absolutely beautiful. *applause* oh oh oh and *throwing roses at your feet*

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  9. @Jewels: You are too sweet (picking up roses at my feet)! Thanks for your kind words and your lovely comment Sweetness!

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  10. Needs more sex.

    Kidding. Wow, you're quite the wordsmith. This was really well put together. For this, you get beatnik snaps.

    *snap snap snap*

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  11. I buried this because it's not my usual smartass tone, but tell me if you think it would be okay as a new post.

    http://katsidhe.blogspot.com/2001/01/concrete.html

    Thanks for the vote of confidence, my darling one.~ *mwah!*

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  12. This is excellent! I loved it!!!!

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  13. @Lost: Wow, beatnik snaps?? That is indeed the highest compliment one could ever wish to receive. I am honored!

    @Sweet Kat: I love love love your concrete post. Seriously. I could live it through your words and it kinda freaked me out. That means it's awesome. Post it darling!

    @Jules: Thanks so much for the feedback. Glad you liked it!

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  14. I love it when people take some almost insignificant event and turn it into art. And you didn't even use the word vagina!

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  15. @Aimee: Thanks for the comment girlie! I just couldn't think of a way to work in vagina on this point, I tried believe me. No worries, I'll be back to my regular scheduled programming soon enough, stay tuned!

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  16. Great job! You did the prompt some major justice.

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  17. @S816: Thanks for the feedback TJ! Means a ton coming from you based on what you have been putting out there!

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  18. RG, the other side suits you just as well. Words to live by. Well done.

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  19. @ib: Thanks so much! I appreciate the feedback. Glad you are ok with the other side of RG! I promise I won't bore you with it often

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  20. Great result! I like that you went with fiction, but could totally be, well, you know, like non fiction, as in true. You know? Like, yeah, that's what I mean.

    Good post sweetie!

    惄 my cyber house rules dot com

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  21. @Nikki: Thanks so much hon! Glad you are back around, I've missed you sweets!

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  22. Oh and Nikki, this is half fiction, half non. I metaphorically took this tumble down the stairs a few years ago, still hurt like hell just slightly less bleeding to be seen.

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  23. this was so well written
    that was quite a tumble, girl :)

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  24. @Rene: Thanks for the positive comment! And yes, it really was... took a long time to pick myself up off the concrete, that's for sure! Thanks for visiting Random Girl

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